Posted by: Tailz
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Posted on: 06/11/09 - 9:04:29 PM - EDT
Rating of: 2 of a possible 5
The opening was very slow. The narrative
itself was not the greatest of writing, and
the actor seemed to lack any feeling and
emotion when reading through it.
I don't understand the "this city's been my
home since I can remember" line. If Batman
were to say that, it would make sense, but
seeing as Nightwing is unique in that the
city he fights for has no emotional ties to
him nor his past, I'm kind of curious as to
why you chose to write this line. He spent a
LONG time in Gotham. His childhood, his teen
years, and part of his adult life were spent
in the mansion, as Robin. Your narrative
suggests that he's been in Bludhaven his
Also, still discussing the narrative, why
would Nightwing ponder if his work is "worth"
it? I don't think that's ever been a
motivation factor for neither Nightwing or
Robin. There's zero incentive in what he does
to begin with. There never was, nor will
there ever will be. He (chooses) to live a
life where emotional bond is nearly forbidden
due to the high risk potential loved ones
could be put at. The reason for doing what he
does is that only he can, not for some big
pay off, which, again, your narrative
One last thin concerning the narrative.
Nightwing should never consider crossing the
line. Period. It takes away from his
character. Batman? At times, if written well,
pondering whether to cross line could work.
But that's Batman. Nightwing is not Batman.
He's not a dark, brooding loner. Everything
I've ever read with Nightwing has always come
off as more upbeat. The narrative tosses that
out of the window.
So, during the opening lines, and after, we
see Nightwing, standing over Bludhaven. I
felt you could have been a bit more daring
with the camera work here. It would have been
much more dramatic to look over his shoulder
rather than below him.
The lead actor's movements in the opening
scene are very slow, and very stiff. His head
turn took way too long, and was not dramatic
at all. He came off as a little goofy, seeing
as his movements lacked fluidity. It's like
he was trying to hard. That falls on the
direction. The actor's do what their told. As
the director, it's your responsibility to
portray your actors as the characters you've
casted them as.
The sound in this opening shot was terrible.
You could blatantly hear the wind rushing
through the camera's mic. I understand we're
not all professionals, but, considering you
had a voice over to open the film, you could
have easily lowered, or better yet, muted the
After the opening shot, the credits kick in.
This is where your already slow start comes
to nearly a halt. I'm not trying to be mean,
but in all honesty, no one cares to know who
did what or played who in your film. It's
great that you're proud of the people who've
helped you get this thing together, but save
it for the end. Having long running credits
open your film kills its momentum, and
sometimes drives people away from watching
The next scene picks up the pace a bit, but
seemed very forced, and underwhelming.
Killing off Barbara seemed very rushed and
underdeveloped. There wasn't much to the
scene. And again, it didn't help that, with
the exception of the actor playing Soames,
everyone else came off flat. Nightwing again
lacked any feeling and emotion, and once
more, the director needs to try and pull
everything he can out of the actor. This is
your lead guy, and he's phoning it in, or so
it would seem.
The first fight scene was choreographed and
edited well, but the sound effects were over
the top, and at times silly. They took away
from the drama of the fight. Also, the wave
of electricity thrown at Nightwing came out
of nowhere, and seemed a bit out of place.
So after getting electrocuted, Nightwing is
held by two goons, while the third retrieves
a bag. Soames (who is doing a fine job of
acting, by the way) pulls out Batman's cowl,
insinuating that they have taken out Batman,
even revealing to Nightwing they know his
Again, your writing here seems to ignore some
very common traits from the actual comics.
Number one, Dudley Soames and his B team of
baddies wouldn't stand a chance against
Batman, especially in Gotham, where I assume
they would've killed him. Number 2, even if
they somehow managed to kill Batman, I would
think that the advanced technology Nightwing
shares with Batman, Robin, and Alfred
would've led to him finding out about his
mentor's death long before this scene.
Inconsistencies like these really make it
difficult t o pass your writing as credible.
Also, the camera work here needs to be
livened up a bit. Shooting the scene from
several different angles would have been
beneficial to keep the scene moving. When a
camera stays on the same angle, not only does
it get boring to look at, it also slows the
story down a bit.
So, after getting shocked, and finding out
two very important people in his "family" are
gone, Nightwing is tied up somewhere, where
he is being guarded by one of Soames' goons.
Nightwing escapes rather easily, and goes on
to kill, yes kill, Soames' goon.
Again, you're not staying true to the source
material. Nightwing never kills. Never. It's
instilled into him.
Also, it was made to look too easy for
Nightwing to escape. There was no sense or
urgency or despair. He just unlocked himself.
If it was that easy, why didn't he do it when
he still had a chance to get Soames? The
scene just didn't make a whole lot of sense.
The fight scene here, minus the goofy flurry
of punches to the chest and sound effects,
was again well put together.
After killing off the goon, Nightwing
escapes, and Soames is informed. There is
then a hint given that Batman is in fact
alive, and that Nightwing doesn't know. You
would think that after being nearly killed,
Batman would be quick to inform his former
ward of the impending danger he may be in,
but that for some reason is not addressed
We then see Nightwing on a building, where he
delivers yet another narrative, this time
proclaiming his abandonment of the Nightwing
mantle, and that of Red Hood, which
apparently would make it okay for him to kill
I just can't agree with the writing here.
Number one, he has no ties to Red Hood, and
neither does Bludhaven. So from that
standpoint, Red Hood is made to look useless
in terms of instilling fear, as well as
driving Dick Grayson to becoming darker.
Number two, the title supposedly comes into
play here. But resurrected would suggest that
Nightwing has some how come back to life, and
has been reborn. He's not reborn, nor
resurrected. he just changed his gimmick. I
think "Death of Nightwing" or "Nightwing:
Fallen", though terrible titles I know, would
have been a better choice.
The casting was okay. I think that the lead
actor was by far the worst, but he was not
terrible. He just didn't fit the role. His
voice was a huge distraction, as well as his
line delivery. He was very flat and did a lot
of line reading. This is where direction
kicks in. I know I've said it several times
already, but the actors' performances are a
direct reflection of the director. It's on
you whether or not they pull off their role.
The actor doesn't have to be perfect, nor
casted based on physical or ethnic
appearances. But they do need to be directed
well enough to make the viewier at least semi
buy into what their watching.
Overall, while there is obviously a good
amount of effort here, there just isn't
enough good to outweigh the bad. The
direction is seemingly the biggest issue, and
the writing is a very close second.
I read the review that stood up for the
director, and stated that this was rushed and
other reasons why it may not have been as
good as it could have been. In the end,
unfortunately, there are no excuses. I
applaud everyone involved for getting this
done, but no matter what reason or excuses
are thrown out to defend the film, it is what
it is. If you had to rush to get it done, or
were pressed for time, or had to compromise,
maybe it should have been left alone, and
lived to be filmed another day.